http://www.sloh.org/athletics-physical-exams/
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I need a little editing, because it goes directly to the debate car scared me and he thinks theres defects. This section, in particular, sounds a little off so if you can help me edit to make it sound more elegant, I will be SOO grateful. Athletics and physical activity should be encouraging, not demanding. Not all students are able to pass these requirements, and appears to be excessively injurious for a term of two additional years of physical education if the test is not passed. While the CAHSEE academic tests offer students more than once passing the CAHSEE fitness section gives only an opportunity for a student passes or fails. This puts less athletic in an academic disadvantage, which forced to remove classes to make room for physical education.
Athletic and physical activity should be encouraging, not demanding. Not all students are able to pass these requirements, and it seems unduly prejudice the demand for an extra two years of physical education if the test is not passed. While academic tests CAHSEE offer students an opportunity to spend more, the fitness section of the CAHSEE only allows an opportunity for a student pass or fail .???? Put less athletic students in academic disadvantage, forcing them to remove classes to make room for physical education.?? This last part is not fits all
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